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Divinity, Part 1, Book 1: Before the Fall, Chapter 1

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A cool breezed passed through Azrael’s hair as he and his apprentice, Adalyn, touched down on the steps of the Most High’s temple. It was a beautiful morning in the Celestial World. There was not a cloud in the sky to impede their flight.

Azrael landed first, his silver armor still showing tarnish from the days of war long passed. His wings were in no better shape; many of their feathers had been stained black or red from the fighting. He was a worn, but proud warrior angel.

Despite his less than glamorous appearance, he still tried to make himself presentable for his audience with the Most High. His brown hair had been cut short and he wore a new white tunic with red seems under his armor. He sucked in a deep breath and turned in time to see his apprentice hovering at his side, “Adalyn, you land this instant. Don’t forget that even now you’re in the presence of the Most High!”

Adalyn hovered for a moment before folding her wings behind her and dropping to the balls of her feet, “Forgive me, Master. I guess I’m just more used to flying than I am walking. I never understood why the Most High would forbid us from flying in his presence.”

“Ours is not to wonder why.” Azrael replied. “Just do as you have been commanded as is our mandate.”

Adalyn nodded, “I understand master, I am doing my best.”

“How is it you fought through as much of the war as you did without having to use your legs?” Azrael asked in a simultaneously amused and annoyed tone.

Adalyn shrugged, “I guess I just got lucky. There was always enough space to fly. What little time I actually spent on my feet, I was usually hiding.”

“Luck is a fickle thing. It can run out very easily. You’d best get used to using your legs. They are far sturdier than your wings and can help supplement your speed. Someday your wings could get injured and you’d be forced to use your legs to walk. Where would you be then?”

Adalyn nodded, though his words seemed cryptic, “Master… I understand. I will endeavor to do so.”

Azrael nodded, “Good.”

“I wonder why the Most High would summon us at such a late hour when he plans to take rest.” Adalyn said as she brushed a strand of blonde hair away from her face and tucked it behind her right ear.

“Such is the way of the Most High.” Azrael responded. “We’re angels; our job is to be at his beckoned call. Be patient, we will soon discover his motives behind this meeting.”

Her bright blue eyes shined with wonder as she looked up the long staircase of ivory and gold to the massive cathedral at the top.  The stairs were long and winding, and seemed to go on forever. It would not be a quick stroll for them.

Adalyn stretched her clean white wings and then folded them behind her back with a single thrust. She didn’t want to anger the Most High or her master as they made their way to his chambers. She wasn’t used to walking, but she had good enough balance to manage.

Adalyn had only been called before the Most High once or twice previously and those times were during the war. At that point, the no-fly restriction had not been imposed around the Most High’s home. Just looking at the stairs, she could tell that her legs were going to be sore.

Azrael beckoned to her forward, allowing her thoughts to escape, as he moved, “Keep up Adalyn, he’s waiting for us.”

Adalyn nodded as she adjusted her beige maiden’s dress and tightened her sash. The soft cotton tightened around her hips as her hands moved to her hair. She parted it in the middle and made sure that the few loose strands were brushed back behind her ear once again. The blonde strands flowed to her neck and shimmered in the sunlight.

Once she felt presentable, Adalyn followed close behind Azrael. Finding balance wasn’t easy for her, but she did the best she could. She found it hard to believe that the Most High’s beloved children had to walk like that every day of their lives.

It took some time for the two angels to reach the top. The stairs seemed to stretch onward forever. They were beautifully carved and perfectly smooth, but the ivory still began to hurt her feet as they were not used to continuous walking.

Once at the top, Adalyn saw two large gold statues standing with their spears crossed, blocking the entrance. Neither statue reacted to their presence as the angels approached. They looked like nothing more than large, lifeless pieces of metal.

Adalyn took a close look at one of them, examining its face. The sun gleamed from the statue’s shiny surface. Its eyes were glossed over, making it difficult to tell if they were opened or closed. She turned to Azrael with a surprised look on her face, “I wasn’t aware that the Most High employed titans.”

For a moment, it appeared as though Azrael didn’t hear her. He simply closed his eyes and nodded at the two guards. Adalyn’s eyes narrowed as she reached out to her mentor, “Master?”

As though responding to some silent command, the statues immediately came to life. What looked like nothing more than shiny metal, now looked organic as the statues pulled their spears back and cleared a pathway for the two angels. Their movement was sudden and unexpected, causing Adalyn to jump back with a slight yelp.

Azrael smirked at her reaction, knowing that this was not her first encounter with these creatures, “Why were you startled? You saw titans on the battlefield, you know?”

Adalyn nodded, “Yeah I remember, but they weren’t so… mechanical at that point. I never saw them as statues.”

Azrael shook his head as the two angels proceeded inside. Adalyn’s eyes remained on the guards as she passed under their spears. Part of her expected to see them come crashing down on her as she walked.

Once the angels were through, the massive guards closed the doorway and resumed their silent vigil. There was no further movement from them as the angels continued forward. Adalyn looked back at them for a moment, studying their stance.

After a few seconds, she turned back and followed closely behind her master. The stone tunnel was dark, but there was a bright light at the end. It was the only illumination that the tunnel had.

The next room was unlike anything a mere mortal could imagine. The cathedral ceilings surpassed the beauty of those in the mortal city of Rome. Murals of all creation covered every inch of the ceiling above them.

The tall, lead plated, windows stretched up to the top of the walls. The dome at the top had windows with multiple beautiful colors carefully laid into the panes, while the glass lower to the ground was crystal clear and looked out on a star field. Whole galaxies could be viewed from any one of the windows.

The ground was an unusual combination of stone and grass with cool mist slightly obscuring it. Adalyn’s bare feet tickled as she slowly stepped out on to the small field. It was a sensation that she was unfamiliar with, having relied mostly on her wings for travel.

The top of the cathedral was an ornate dome with several murals depicting the deeds of the Most High’s children. Hovering near the ceiling was a bright star-like orb that pulsed slowly. The silhouette of a human was in the center of the orb.

Azrael walked out onto the field and stopped directly under the orb with Adalyn to his left. There was a brief silence when Azrael closed his eyes. His chin rose slightly as though he were listening to someone above him.

Azrael opened his eyes, “Yes Master, I understand. The final pockets of resistance from those loyal to Lucifer have either been banished from the immortal realm or eradicated. Our work here is finished, the war is over, and the restoration of our world has begun.”

Again, Azrael closed his eyes briefly and then reopened them, “The mortal world has gone awry? How?”

There was a long hum before Azrael responded, “A recent increase in the wars amongst your children? So you believe that the recent increase has been engineered somehow… No, I don’t believe that the continuous fighting is coincidence either.”

Adalyn rolled her eyes, “The mortal world is continuously at war with itself. I should know. I’m the one ferrying their souls to Hell. They find new ways of killing each other all the time, what makes you think that this is any different?”

Azrael turned and glared at his apprentice, “Adalyn!”

The chamber shook with a mighty roar as a nervous Azrael turned back, “Forgive her, master. She is still ignorant of the proper decorum when in your presence. I accept responsibility for that.”

Another low hum emanated from the ceiling. Azrael smiled and nodded, “I will, don’t worry about her…”

Then his face quickly turned serious as he spoke, “Master do you believe that Lucifer is behind these events?”

The room began to tremble as though something massive had slammed into the wall. Azrael twisted his lips thoughtfully and shook his head, “No, I don’t believe so either. His powers outside the underworld are severely limited. I agree that he is most likely no longer a threat.”

There was another brief silence before he continued, “Master, is it not possible that the ones you love the most have begun warring on their own? Our prophets and our messengers ceased so long ago. Given how easily corrupted their minds can be, is it not possible that your children are warring because of their own lust for power?”

Azrael could feel an angry vibration under his feet as Adalyn defended his position, “The Church you guided and helped to create has taken over most of the known world, but they have become corrupt and decadent. Their power is beginning to dwindle. The uprisings of these new revolutionaries, who are now waging a religious war, must truly be a burden on you.”

The room trembled harder this time. Tiny cracks appeared in the wall, causing Adalyn to step back. She clenched her jaw as she looked up, “Master, with the utmost respect, they’re a savage race, not worthy of this much compassion…”

“Adalyn, be silent!” Azrael yelled out as he stepped in front of his apprentice. “You’ve said enough.”

Adalyn lowered her eyes and stepped away, “Forgive me.”

With his apprentice finally subdued, Azrael turned back to the star, “Master, do you believe it may be time for another cleansing, as it was in the time of Noah?”

The floor rumbled for a moment, causing Azrael to frown, “Perhaps not…”

At that moment, the echoes turned their attention away from Azrael. The Most High’s attention turned to the younger angel. Azrael turned nervously to his apprentice to see what she was going to do.

Adalyn closed her eyes as the floor began to tremble under her, “Yes, I do understand Master, but I do not share your faith in human kind anymore. They fight and tear one another to pieces. Would it not be better to start over and…?”

The room shook harder as an angry moan resonated around the room. Adalyn stepped back, “Forgive me, Master, it was not my intention to speak out of turn. You are right; perhaps such actions are no longer appropriate. Humanity is not so quick to believe that you are responsible for such natural events any longer.”

Azrael shook his head as the voice turned back to him. Once it quieted down, he spoke, “Very well, Master, we will investigate your suspicions to the best of our ability and report them to Michael if we see anything suspicious. Until then, we are to continue to repair the damage done to our world.”

He then bowed and turned to Adalyn, “Come, the Most High needs his rest. The battle with Lucifer and the situation in the Mortal Realm have left him weary.”

Adalyn curtseyed before following Azrael, “Rest well, my lord.”

The two angels turned and exited the massive cathedral hall. The bright aura levitating near the ceiling slowly dimmed as they exited. Adalyn looked back to see the room slowly going dark.

Neither one of the angels spoke as they made their way outside and back down the ivory staircase. The silence lingered until they reached the misty ground. It was an uncomfortable walk for Adalyn. She could feel tension in the air as she followed her master.  It didn’t help that her feet were also aching as she walked.

Neither angel wanted to face the grim reality that everything they had known was changing. Adalyn knew in her heart that their world may never be the same. Its beauty that was at one time unequaled was now healing from a war that had been over for eons.

Large fields where angels had once frolicked were now scorched from a massive flame and peppered with massive craters from demon attacks. The angels had begun restoration work, but it was mired by the remaining pockets of resistance from the war, as well as the work in the mortal world. It seemed like the restoration would never get done.

Once they had reached the misty ground, Adalyn stretched her wings and turned to Azrael, “The humans may be warring, but at least there is finally peace in the Celestial Realm. With Lucifer and his top followers finally gone, things should settle down.”

“Peace…” Azrael responded as his battle hardened features began to soften. “It’s hard to believe that something so beautiful could be so fickle. Do not trust it and never count on it lasting. There will always be darkness in the distance. It is the reason we must remain vigilant at all times.”

Adalyn nodded, “Your words are true and wise, Master. I spoke without thinking, forgive me.”

Azrael smiled, “You are still new to the way of the orders, your duties and the wars have stalled your training. The innocence you possess is not a failing. You will learn quickly. There is nothing to forgive. Do not be afraid to speak your mind around me.”

“Thank you, Master.” Adalyn responded appreciatively. “Your patience is most kind. As it was when you trained me during the war.”

“You have become a fine warrior for the Most High and I am very proud of everything you’ve accomplished.” Azrael replied, “Remember everything that I have taught you… Remember the swordsmanship, remember the techniques and the power, but more important than anything, remember to keep your heart true.”

“Yes Master,” Adalyn said obediently, “always.”

“Good, just remember everything that I have taught you…” Azrael said darkly, “and you should be safe.”

His words sent a chill down Adalyn’s spine, causing her wings to flutter. She looked at her mentor with an air of concern as she spoke, “Safe from what? Is everything okay, Master?”

Azrael blinked as though he were coming out of a trance, “Oh, um, yes, everything’s fine. Don’t mind me, I’m just feeling a little ominous right now.”

Adalyn smiled, “You’re always feeling ominous, Master. It’s like the war has made you paranoid.”

“Maybe it has.” Azrael admitted. “Would you excuse me, Adalyn? I have some work to do.”

“Work?” Adalyn asked. “I thought we were going to make for the training grounds?”

Azrael nodded, “I know, you go on ahead. I’ll meet you there later… once I’m done.”

“If you’re sure. Finding someone to spar with shouldn’t be a problem while you’re gone.” Adalyn replied.

“Good.” Azrael said. “I’ll leave you to it.”

Azrael gave Adalyn a smile before spreading his wings and launching himself into the clouds. At that moment, his form disappeared into a bright light. It almost seemed like the sun had momentarily expanded as Azrael disappeared.

Adalyn covered her eyes to protect herself from being blinded. The light lasted only a moment, but when it disappeared and she was finally able to lower her hands, Azrael was gone. There was no sign of him anywhere near by.

Adalyn could make no sense of her master’s cryptic words. Her heart was filled with wonder as she contemplated what he had said. Did he know something that could threaten the fragile peace that they had fought so hard for? He had been acting unusual recently, but Azrael was known for being eccentric.

Throughout the war, Azrael had been more than a mentor to her; he had been a close friend and confidant. No matter how much work it was, or how stubborn she could be, he never gave up on her. Part of her always suspected that he did not entirely trust her, and tried to keep her at arms length. She resented it, but he may have been trying to protect her.

After a few minutes of tossing her thoughts back and forth in her mind, she decided that it was best to just let it go for now. He had never led her awry before, so there was no reason to believe he would now. She trusted him, but made it a point to ask him to explain his words later.

More musical inspiration!

As I put the final touches on Divinity, this song was playing quite often. The sound of the male and female vocals mixed with a very unusual style of music really got the ideas flowing. This is Van Canto… sort of an Acappella Metal band…

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Divinity Q&A

Hi all, thought I’d do a little question and answer session about Divinity. Some of these were questions that people have asked me over time in working with the book, others are just questions that I know some people are wondering, or may ask after reading, so I thought I’d get them out of the way now. If I miss any though, please feel free to leave a comment, I’m always happy to respond to my readers!

Q: If you had to categorize the book, how would you?

A: Historical Fantasy. I think it fits almost perfectly there.
Q: How long have you been working on Divinity.

A: A LONG TIME! I’m not kidding… I think I was still in College when I wrote the initial draft… it was about 60k words and not very good at that point, and back then, the title layout was going to be more like Magnifica, which I decided against this time around.

Q: Where did you get the idea to write about Divinity?

A: It basically came to me after writing several flop short stories and fan fictions. I took a few subjects that I knew a lot about and molded a story around them. However, the initial ground work for the story came from two places; The music I listen to, and the teaching of my High School Religious ed teacher, Dr. Pirozzi. His teachings about belief vs. mythology vs. reality was key in creating the central story.

Q: What is the central themes

A: Do I have to choose just one? Well, there’s more… Forbidden Romance, overcoming adversity, faith, and challenging one’s own worldview.

Q: You seem to be very highly critical of organized religion and blind faith… are you an atheist?

A: NO!!! Far from it. I’m a catholic. I attended catholic school and even taught religious education for a few years to middle school kids. I want to make it clear that I believe in God and follow the teachings of my church. That having been said, I’ve always felt that questioning one’s beliefs, the wisdom of our leaders, and taking a close look at the writings and rules of a religion is a very healthy thing. Blind faith with no reasoning can be a very dangerous thing as history has shown us over and over. Asking questions isn’t a sin and should be encouraged.

Q: Are any of your characters fictional based on people you know.

A: There are historical characters based on real people, but as to whether or not I based any of the fictional characters on anyone I know… ummm… no comment.

Q: Are you planning on writing a sequel to Divinity?

A: Shhhhh!!! 😉

Q: What was the biggest obstacle that you had to overcome in your writing?

A: Well… being a slightly above amateur historian… I’m a stickler for historical accuracy. I know how that must sound, given the fictional premise of the story, but even in fiction, there should be fact, especially if you’re writing about people and places that actually existed. Let me give you an example… take Pearl Harbor… watch the battle scene…

I could spend all day going through the inaccuracies of this scene… but I’d like to point out one glaring one that always vexed me. Go to the end of the video where the heroine is running away from gunfire as the Japanese peppered the hospital… IT NEVER HAPPENED! It was reported by American and Japanese News sources alike, as well as witnesses on both sides that the Japanese NEVER FIRED on the hospital. Sure, some stray shots may have hit the hospital during the battle, that’s expected, but this portrays the Japanese not just as aggressors, but cold-hearted killers. Even though it’s historically documented that even when the Japanese had a clear shot, they would not fire on the hospital.
To me, that’s a serious crime and a disgrace. If you want to come up with a completely fictional story that’s fine, but when you write a story around fictional characters and then give the impression that the events around them actually happened, it’s a different ball game. So to answer the question, the hardest part was making sure that I did not make the same mistake. I had to carefully research the historical figures that I was using in my story to get as close to accurate as I could… but given that a lot of these characters lived over 500 years ago, there really isn’t much on many of them, so a lot of their personalities are based on my own opinions and research.
So in the end, the biggest hurdle that I had to overcome was creating the story in a way that it could happen without altering history. That’s right, as far as the reader is concerned, what I wrote should be historically possible.

Q: Where did you come up with your characters’ names?

A: I’ve gotten a lot of praise for using very distinct character names and I’m proud of that. I research the names of people, not only by country, but by region and came up with my cast that way. For the Angels, that was a bit more complicated. If you’ll notice in most texts regarding angels, their names almost always end in either ‘iel’ (Gabriel, Uriel, Jophiel), ‘lyn’ (Roselyn), or ‘ael’ (Michael, Amael, Samael) with a few exceptions (Lucifer, Layla, Xaphan). So I basically took the names that already existed and used them to create new ones like Adalyn.

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Divinity up on Amazon.

It looks like Divinity is now up on both Kindle and Softcover through Amazon. Hardcover to follow soon.

Kindle

Softcover

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DIVINITY… IS PUBLISHED!!!!

It is with great pride and a little trepidation, that I announce that Divinity is now and forever Published!!!

450 pages
James\Harrington
ISBN-13: 978-0692336410 (Custom Universal)
ISBN-10: 0692336419
BISAC: Fiction / Fantasy / Historical

Synopsis:
How could it come to this? Why would God let this happen to me? These were questions two very different souls in very different circumstances were forced to ask.
Giovanni was a poor fisherman living in 16th Century Venice. His entire family had been lost to the white plague. He suffered through their deaths only to discover that he too was infected with it. He is now alone and questioning his faith.
The angel, Adalyn, was a hero of the Celestial War against Lucifer. All knew and admired her until she uncovered a plot to overthrow the Most High. In an attempted cover up, Adalyn is betrayed and cast out of Heaven. She is sent to the mortal world to face torture and death at the hands of the creatures she most fears: humans.
Their worlds become intertwined when, by chance, Giovanni rescues her while out fishing. Injured and blind as the result of her expulsion, Adalyn has little choice but to rely on this primitive creature for protection against the Church, Lucifer, and God’s own decree if she is to expose the true traitor and save all of existence.

Hard Cover 

Softcover

Kindle (TBD)

Thanks to everyone for your help along the way!!!

Author’s Advice Pt. 8

How difficult is it?

Heh, unbelievably if you go the traditional route! Even if you go the indie route, it’s difficult…

Okay, that’s the short -literal- answer. Here’s the real one:

So you’ve got an idea in your head. You’ve got a story you want to write, now you want to write it and get it published… awesome!
So how do you do it? How do you make yourself stand out and accomplish such a goal when everyone and his mother wants to get something in print.

First of all, put the thought of everyone else out of your head. You’re not competing with the literally billions of people who want to get something published, you’re not. Why do I say that? Take enormous number of people, now cut that number down by the amount of people who actually have ideas that can be put to paper, creative stories, recipes, historical reference, etc. Suddenly that Billions drops to a few Billion.Good, that’s a start.
Next cut out the number of people don’t actually WANT to write something like that down and/or who don’t have the time/drive/determination to do it. That brings the number down into the millions.
Finally, cut down the number of people capable of writing length manuscripts. I know it sounds like I am taking a stab at the intelligence of people and I’m trying not to… but we all knew those people in college that struggled to write a ten page term paper. Heck, I had people drop out of one of my advanced history classes when they found out that our final grade was a 30 page paper.

Now you are down in the thousands. Next, cut out all the people who don’t have the drive/time/determination after getting the book written to take the time to submit it to agents and keep getting rejection after rejection until one finally says yes. What does that narrow it down to?

Well, I can’t say, because I honestly don’t know. The truth of the matter is that there are an uncountable number of agents out there and each are looking for the next Harry Potter or Game of Thrones. Are you willing to keep at it? Are you willing to continuously send out, re-evaluate, and rewrite hooks and presentations to agents?

If you decide to go the indie route, are you willing to take the time to advertise and submit your book for purchase?

So I realize at this point, that I haven’t answered the question. How do you compete with the rest of the world? Well… you don’t. See after subtracting all those people and answering the above questions, the remaining number is 1. That’s right, you’re competing with 1 person; yourself.

You will be fighting the urge to give up, fighting frustration, fighting your own tendencies and shortcomings, and in the end, whether or not you’re able to get published lies completely with you and no one else.

Sound easy? It’s not. Facing down yourself is arguable one of the hardest things a person can do, which brings me back to why I said it was unbelievably hard. You’re going to get frustrated. You’re going to get depressed, and you’re going get discouraged and question whether or not it’s even worth the effort. How do I know? Because I’ve been there. I got rejection after rejection before I put Divinity on the back burner to work on Magnifica, but I think my cousin said it best, “You can get a million ‘no’s’ but who cares? All it takes is one yes. You get that yes, and all of those no’s are completely meaningless.”
Very true!

At this point, you may be expecting some sort of pep talk out of me, telling you to keep at it, to never give up, and never quit.
Be prepared to be disappointed. Honestly, I’m not going to say that to anyone because I am not going to lead you down a primrose path. Getting published is not for everyone and many would consider it not worth it. Even after you do get published, where does that leave you? Do you think Dean Koontz, Stephen King, John Carpenter, and the like get rich of their book sales? Think again.

The truth is, authors get closed to nothing for their books, it’s a very small %. The few that do make it big, do so because their book sells millions of copies and then get’s turned into a movie. At that point, the author’s income comes from going to conventions and giving talks at schools and such, as well as their share of the proceeds from the movie.

Most authors will never see that kind of money within the pages of what they write. So all I am saying is be realistic. If you are prepared for all of the above, then have at it and good luck to you!

If not, stop, put the pen down. Tell your story to your children as a bedtime thing or as an anecdote at a party. Writing isn’t for you and it’ll just cause you to neglect what matters most.

To steal a phrase from the NeverEnding Story…

“Kind people find out that they are cruel. Brave men find out that they are really cowards! Confronted by their true selves, most men run away, screaming!”
The same can be said for when you’re writing. The hardest enemy you’ll ever face is yourself. Think about that before starting this monumental task.

Anyway, that is it for this one. Catch you on the flip side,

-Jim

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Author’s page!

Hi All,

Just a quick update, my Amazon page is now officially up and running! Feel free to stop by and check it out!
My Page

Catch you on the flip side!
-Jim

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Author Advice Pt. 7

Taking criticism….

So there are a couple different types of criticism that I’d like to go over;

Positive criticism: This type of criticism is when a friend, family member, or other person gives you there opinion on something you’ve done in the hopes of helping you improve your work. It is well-meaning, and often quite useful. This is the type where you have to realize that someone is just trying to help. You may welcome it, you may not. You way want it, you may not, but it’s bound to happen. Take that criticism to heart and then decide what to do with it. As always, however, smile and be appreciative. Again, the person is well-meaning.

Negative criticism: Nothing’s worse than when someone comes up to you and says ‘Your work sucks!’ or gives your work 1 star on a book rating website without giving any explanation why… but it happens. You can get mad, you can let them have it… no doubt you want to, but at the end of the day, it solves nothing.
Ignore it.

Underhanded criticism: So I’m giving this one it’s own category because I’m really not sure it completely belongs in the negative… this is where a friend or family member will say something like ‘Wonderful, now that you’re published, you should write about (insert subject), you know, something people would actually read about.’
Excuse me!? Okay, I’m going to stop for a moment on this one because in these cases, it’s hard to tell if the person is trying in their own way to be well-meaning, or just flat out mean spirited. Before getting angry, stop. Think about who is saying this to you. Is this someone who would intentionally insult you or belittle your work?
The best way to handle something like this… at least in my opinion, would be to callously say something like, ‘What are you saying? No one would read what I already write?’

See where it goes. Then you can choose the action from dealing with constructive criticism or negative criticism.

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Divinity

Hi all,

It is with great excitement… and a lot of nervousness, that I am finally able to give everyone a first glimpse at the novel that had me pulling my hair out for almost 8 years!

Divinity. A tale of two worlds violently thrust together by fate and circumstance. A story of overcoming insurmountable odds (it doesn’t get much more insurmountable than God’s decree), and of forbidden love.

Synopsis:

How could it come to this? Why would God let this happen to me? These were questions two very different souls in very different circumstances were forced to ask.

Giovanni was a poor fisherman living in 16th Century Venice. His entire family had been lost to the white plague. He suffered through their deaths only to discover that he too was infected with it. He is now alone and questioning his faith.
The angel, Adalyn, was a hero of the Celestial War against Lucifer. All knew and admired her until she uncovered a plot to overthrow the Most High. In an attempted cover up, Adalyn is betrayed and cast out of Heaven. She is sent to the mortal world to face torture and death at the hands of the creatures she most fears: humans.
Their worlds become intertwined when, by chance, Giovanni rescues her while out fishing. Injured and blind as the result of her expulsion, Adalyn has little choice but to rely on this primitive creature for protection against the Church, Lucifer, and God’s own decree if she is to expose the true traitor and save all of existence.

The release date is set for next week, barring any unforeseeable problems and will be available in softcover, hardcover, and in digital format!

The book is 100% my own original word… except for the cover, which was skillfully done by my friend Brett Warniers!

If adventure, history, romance, and fantasy whets your appetite, take a moment and check Divinity out!

Thank you!!!!
-Jim

Divinity Background

Hi All,

I hope that you’re all as psyched for the release of Divinity as I am. I’ve received a bunch of emails asking about the release… arguably a lot more than I expected, so let me thank you for that beforehand, that’s awesome! My answer is… soon, very soon. I’m just trying to work out a few bugs with the production of the hardcover. We’ve never done this before so we want to make sure it’s perfect.

Anyway, I wanted to give everyone a little background on this book and explain why it’s such a big deal of a release while the last two Magnifica’s weren’t as hyped. For that, we need to go back to 2005.

I was heading into my last year of college and had just finished writing my little piece of fan fiction known as Star Wars: The Face of Evil. It was a story surrounding completely original characters set in the Star Wars universe with cameos by the likes of Luke, Kyle, Han, R2, and Admiral Ackbar. I can’t go into much more detail about it because I used the central themes, and large parts of the storyline when I wrote another book that is waiting in the winds, but I will say that after I finished it and let people read it, they told me that I should try to get it published.

Published? Um… George Lucas (now Disney) might have something to say about that. I couldn’t afford the royalties and just kind of shrugged the suggestion off. However, it was at this point that I started thinking ‘Well if people liked this story, how would they feel about a completely original story written the same way? Could I pull it off? Up until now the only completely original stories I’ve written were all short stories…’

It was at this point that I took stock of several different subjects before sitting down to write Divinity. First, I said to myself ‘What do I know more about than the average person? What could I write a story about?’

The answer came very quickly, ‘Religion, mythology, fantasy, and history.’

Then I started thinking, “What story could I write that would incorporate all of these?”

I put the idea on the back-burner for a few weeks as I tried to sort out the different subjects and come up with themes. Then something wonderful happened… I saw a painting that gave me an idea…

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Hugo Simberg’s Wounded Angel…

I studied the photo over and over and I thought to myself ‘So those two people helping the angel look to be mid to late 1800s or early 1900s (The painting was done in 1903 so that lends credence to this theory).’

I remember shaking my head and thinking, ‘I wonder what would have happened to an angel that appears in the same condition in the 1500s?’

Ahah! I had the bare bones of my story. Given what happened throughout history to people who claimed to be prophets, an injured angel being found would have caused ripples across the land and the religious paranoia of the time would have led people to conclude that this was a fallen angel that needed to be extinguished. Perfect! That’s what I’ll write about.

Within a few weeks, the first draft of Divinity was complete. I loved it, I thought it was perfect and I wanted to try to publish it. Admittedly, I was on a high at that point and wasn’t thinking clearly. I let two people read it and they both HATED it.

Well great… so now my first full length novel was a flop.

Then I went back and read it… first of all, it wasn’t a full length novel as generally speaking, full length novels are 80K+ words and mine came in at 68,004. Secondly… yeah, it was terrible. The angel was a weak damsel in distress, the main character was unlikable, it was all too simple. Plus I had painted the Christian faith in an extremely negative light and that was never my intention. I wanted to use this story to take a shot at the leaders of both the reformation and the Church at the time, not peoples’ beliefs in general.

There was no way around it, this story needed serious dismantling.

I rewrote the story again, this time adding a voyage to hell, and changing who my arch-villain was. A romantic element was added to the story, as were a few Protestant revolutionaries for a little more perspective. The story now came in at 85k so it met the criteria as a novel.

I reread it and was a lot more satisfied with the result, but it was still a grammatical mess and the ideas were all over the place, so I went back and -again- rewrote it. Upon this rewrite, I let one of my cousins and my wife read it (My wife is as critical as they come… and I love her for it). My wife hated it, still thought the main character was unlikeable. My cousin was far more diplomatic and said that there was just too much happening, half way through, you’re just waiting for it to end.

… great…

I rewrote it again, and then started trying to submit it to literary agents, but because I’d never been published before and the work was still admittedly rough… they didn’t pay it any mind.

At this point, I was completely discouraged. I’d had enough and abandoned Divinity all together. I still wrote some short stories and a few other things that I put up online for all to see, but I was done with Divinity. It went into my file drawer for two years.

At this point, I started playing games like Dragon Age and Skyrim. I started thinking to myself ‘You know, all these fantasy stories involving elves and dwarves all take place in either medieval worlds or post-apocalyptic time periods… what would modern day America be like with the introduction of elves and dwarves.

And so Magnifica was born.

Upon completing Magnifica, I handed it to my wife for review, ready to be once again torn apart. She loved it! I couldn’t believe it! She loved the story. I let three more people read it, and sure enough, it got high marks from them as well.

After some serious editing and pushing, it was finally published. Yes, I had a published work out there:
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Two more books followed in the Magnifica series. Both did, and continue to do well (Thank you!).

After Gravestalker was released, I went back and looked at Divinity once again. I reread it one more time and realized, that yes, it wasn’t anywhere near as good as I had thought. My writing had drastically improved since I wrote that, and so it was time to re-tackle Divinity.

The first thing I wanted to do was go back and correct my previous mistakes. I didn’t want another bad review, so I went to my critics for help. How could I improve Divinity. Well… two major things came out of that discussion;

The main HUMAN character needs to be more likable and I needed to divide Divinity up. There were too many separate adventures under one cover. Fair enough, so I went about re-writing it.

First thing I did was slightly weaken my main human character to make him more… well human, and less of a person who could audition for Jesus. I brought him down to Earth and also removed a few of his darker acts. I also made him work to earn the trust of the angel. I brought the theme of prejudice into the story as a reason for the Angel’s distrust in humans. So now, his rescuing her from her initial peril would not be enough for him to earn her trust.

Next I lengthened certain scenes while eliminating others all together. It wasn’t an easy job, but I knew that it had to be done. Finally, it came down to me dividing the story in two. I broke it up, but could not make two coherent books out of the work. Try as I might, the second part, I couldn’t get past 40,000 words. There just wasn’t enough material to work with.

This was make or break for me. If I couldn’t figure something out, Divinity was going back in the drawer, probably forever. I started thinking about it, trying to figure out how I could make this work… how could I divide this up in a way to make it work?

It was at this moment that I came up with an idea. I can’t divide it into two independent books, but what about one epic novel with more than one story that ties into the main plot?

Bingo!

It took some doing, but I completely restructured the story from a single linear novel into a group of short stories and then divided those into book 1 and book 2. (Somewhat like the old testament and new testament.)

I reread it, correcting a few plot flaws and grammatical problems. This was a completely different story from the one I started out with. Not only that, but it worked now in a way that a person could put the story down after one of the internal stories and pick it up again later without having to read the whole entire thing to get the gist of what’s going on. I had it read and edited and now it received high marks.

Divinity was ready.

Following Magnifica’s success, I recruited Brett Warniers (See my cover post) about doing Divinity’s cover. Since he was the one who had broken the simplicity mold, I wanted something intense for Divinity.

That is where we are now. The cover is done and just waiting to be accepted and we’re still working a few of the bugs of the hardcover out.

I Broke It

Check out this incredible new book! Can’t wait to read it myself!

meredithmansfield's avatarMeredith Mansfield, Author

Don’t worry. I’ve fixed it again.

What I broke was the end of THE VOICE OF PROPHECY. You see, one of my critique partners had what sounded like a really good idea. I tried it. It didn’t work.

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If you’ve seen the blurb:

When the two kinds of magic combine in one person, unexpected things happen.
Sensing the presence of lions is one thing. Any member of the Lion Clan could do that. When Vatar sees the hunt through the eyes of one of the big cats—well, that’s something else altogether. And that’s only the beginning of the unusual manifestations of his magic.

When a mysterious voice only he can hear volunteers ancient wisdom, Vatar knows he’s in trouble. After enduring an Ordeal to prove he isn’t haunted by an Evil Spirit, Vatar thinks he may be possessed after all. Or losing his mind. Or cursed.

He must hide his…

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Divinity Update!!!!

Everything has been approved! The files are being completed and a proof copy is being mailed to me for final approval! I’ll keep you all posted, but it looks like Divinity will be happening very soon!!

I’m still waiting on a little more info for the hard cover as it is my goal to have them out at the same time!

Synopsis:
How could it come to this? Why would God let this happen to me? These were questions two very different souls in very different circumstances were forced to ask.

Giovanni was a poor fisherman living in 16th Century Venice. His entire family had been lost to the white plague. He suffered through their deaths only to discover that he too was infected with it. He is now alone and questioning his faith.
The angel, Adalyn, was a hero of the Celestial War against Lucifer. All knew and admired her until she uncovered a plot to overthrow the Most High. In an attempted cover up, Adalyn is betrayed and cast out of Heaven. She is sent to the mortal world to face torture and death at the hands of the creatures she most fears: humans.
Their worlds become intertwined when, by chance, Giovanni rescues her while out fishing. Injured and blind as the result of her expulsion, Adalyn has little choice but to rely on this primitive creature for protection against the Church, Lucifer, and God’s own decree if she is to expose the true traitor and save all of existence.